StoryScript Writing Draft. (week 10)

Drunken Night

by

(Chia Bi Luan)

(2D)

(Detective Alex turns into a cheetah when he is drunk. He has to solve a case of mysterious disappearance in order to keep his job as a detective when Sam disappeared after being stalked by Uno for 2 months.)

EXERCISE 1 / EXERCISE 2 / FINAL ASSIGNMENT (Grade       % )

My Blog: (jchiabi.blogspot.com)

My Email: (biluan.chia@hotmail.com)

Deadline: 15 Jan 2013

EXECUTIVE SUMMARY:

TITLE:                                     (Drunken Night)

GENRE:                                  (Animation, Mystery)

TARGET AUDIENCE:            (20-35 Years Old.)

THE DOMINANT CULTURAL / SOCIAL ISSUE FEATURED IN MY WORK IS:

(Stalker’s who are ignored by the police may end up being a huge threat to the society.)

LOGLINE:

(Detective Alex turns into a cheetah when he is drunk. He has to solve a case of mysterious disappearance in order to keep his job as a detective when Sam disappeared after being stalked by Uno for 2 months.)

SYNOPSIS:

(Synopsis of your story here –2-3 short para, double-spaced)

Alex is a detective that is on the verge of losing his job. He is a carefree guy who cares about nothing but solving cases. He has a secret, and that is, he turn’s into a cheetah when he is drunk. This was also the only time he can show his full potential in solving the cases. He shows his bimbo character and this was also the reason why everyone was giving him pressure in solving the case.

2 months ago, Sam, a 20-year-old woman had come to him for help. Apparently, she had been sensing someone watching her in the shadows and it had gone on for a few days. Panicking, she had come to Alex for help because he was the only one in the office at that time.

2 months later, with no lead, Sam went missing and all that was left was a hand phone and a piece of letter saying: “If you want the girl, find me if you can.” It was a letter addressed to Alex. He had to solve this case in order to get Sam back, as well as keep the job and find out who had sent him this letter.

CHARACTER PROFILES

CHARACTER LIST (All characters)

Key Character - Alex

Supporting Character(s) - Sam

Villain (if any) - Uno

CHARACTER BIO OF KEY CHARACTER

(Character bio here, Key Character only – abt half A4 Page, in note form)

Full investigation skills only when he is drunk.

Turns into a cheetah when he is drunk.

He doesn’t like to drink, but when he does, he has amazing investigation skills.

He is a carefree person.

He likes to drink tea.

He doesn’t like trouble.

He is not a deep thinker.

He does things according to his feelings.

He likes to laugh and he laughs a lot.

He is friendly, popular with girls, but not a player.

He believes in fate.

His favorite line would be, “You will never know, if you don’t try.”

He shows a bimbo-like character when he is drunk.

RESEARCH

(Mention topic/subject for research & source Newspaper clippings, magazine articles, blog, etc etc - Photocopies/Scan)

Book – Easy Kill (Lin Anderson)

REFLECTION PAPER

(a reflection is a write-up on how you derived your own story concept and idea(s) from research & brainstorm done – 2 to 3 para, double spaced)

I thought of this story because I had recently read a storybook with a mystery genre. The plot intrigued me and I thought it would be interesting if the readers could feel the mood and tension of being followed by the stalker, through the book.

The reason I came up with the idea of the main character’s ability when he is drunk, is because, I thought it would be interesting to be able to see a “split personality” in the character, so as to spice up the story, as well as to give a interesting twist to the story.
3 ACT STRUCTURE: (in point form below)

ACT1 SETUP	ACT2 CONFRONTATION	ACT3 RESOLUTION
Key Character(s): Alex Must-have Info: He is a detective who only uses his full skill when he is drunk. He turns into a cheetah when he is drunk.	Confrontation: Uno confronts Alex by text. Whenever Uno wants to challenge Alex, he gets him drunk, one way or another and then starts to play games.	Climax (Grand Finale): Alex managed to kick the gun away from Uno before things got out of hand. Resolution: Alex managed to rescue Sam and catch Uno.
MOTIVE: To save Sam and to find out who sent him the letter, as well as to keep his job.	TURNING POINT: Alex was able to reach the final level of Uno’s “GAME” and managed to hear Sam’s voice when he was at 5th level.	MOTIVE RESOLVED? Yes. Alex managed to keep his job, and even got a promotion. Sam became his girlfriend too.
Conflict/Obstacles: He has no leads except for the hand phone and the letter. He can only pick up leads when the stalker, Uno, text him.	Conflict/Obstacles: Alex had to fight off Uno when he got brutal. Up the Stakes: Uno points a gun to Sam’s head and threatens to kill her if Alex lost.	Moral of the Story if any: Do not judge a book by its cover. Someone who may look nice from the outside may not necessarily be nice on the inside.

Class exercise: dialogue

give your script a suitable title & come up with a logline for your script, based on the following video:

Title : Lies & Accusations.



Come up with a story that goes with the footage

Two woman fights when one of them started accusing the other of something she did not do. In return, the other woman taunted back in spite.

Write the dialogue .  (Between woman A and B)

(Woman A, gets out of car)

Woman A : So you were here!
Woman B : -clicks her tongue- What... it's just you. -rolls her eyes-
Woman A : There's no need to hide from me. I'll still find you no matter where you run to.
Woman B : -sighs in frustration- You are just insane.
Woman A : You dare say that you did not do it?!
Woman B : -glares back- I did not. What prove do you have!
Woman A : -Glares- The two of you were standing so close together, besides i saw you hugging him.
Woman B : That's just because i fell and he caught me! Did you want me to fall and Die?  -says in a annoyed voice-
Woman A : It would be better that way. No? -grits her teeth-
Woman B : -walks away-
Woman A : -pulls her back by grabbing her wrist-
Woman B : -struggles- Oi! What the hell do you want!? -launches forward and pushes woman A-
Woman A : How dare you push me! -glares and pushes back-
Woman A & B : -starts pulling each other's hair- 
Woman A : LET GO!
Woman B : You LET GO FIRST! 
-non of them obliged-
Woman A : YOU!
Woman B : -continues pulling with force- 
Woman A : -stumbles back a little- 
Woman B : -Uses her bag to hit Woman A-
Woman A : -Tackles Woman B to the ground and continues attacking-
Woman B : -Hit's back- 
Two Teens: -pulls them apart- 
Woman A & Woman B : -stares and is embarrassed because the onlookers were watching-
Woman A : -Drives away in a huff-
Woman B : -Walks Away in a huff- 

Ends.


Identify the key character & motive 

Woman A - Motive is to settle things with Woman B for something she may not had done.

Woman B - Motive is to stop woman A from attacking her.

Writing The Dialogue - Case studies (Hitler Clips)

1. Hitler's water bottle is stolen and thrown at Justin Bieber

"Everything has been planned."

H - "Good. Proceed immediately."

-someone throws water bottle at justin bier-

"We have done it sir!"

H- "IT's not enough! Send more people to throw more water bottles! He is unharmed!"

2. Hitler is informed that he is Lee Kuan Yew

H- "That is impossible! We don't look alike at all! If word were to get out, that i am Lee Kuan Yew, I will be laughed at! Bring Me That imbecile who spread these lies!"

                          3. Hitler is informed Santa Claus doesn't exist

H- "Such Lies! I have visited Santa everyday, when i buy those drinks at the vending machine where Santa Claus advertised in it!"

4. Hitler defies gravity

H - "Who The Hell Turned the camera Upside down! How are we going to continue with the shooting like this! The audience are going to complain! I DEMAND YOU TO TILT IT BACK THIS INSTANCE!"

Class exercise 2

Mind your language

Logline: Brown has to teach english to the foreign students in order to keep the job.


Choose two characters: Write character character's Bio.

Ms. Dolores Courtney, The principle of the language school. She dislike man because of something that happened in the past with another language teacher. 

Pakistani Muslim (Ali), he is unemployed and is always smiling. His first meeting with Ms. Dolores started out funny because he misunderstands the meaning of the principles words.


 what are each characters' unique "voice", trait or action? 

Ms. Dolores Courtney, her eyes opens wide when she is agitated. And she has the "AIR"  of authority around her.

Pakistani Muslim (Ali), He smiles all the time and is a joyous person. 



3 act structure:

Act 1:

Key character - Brown.
Motive - To teach english to the foreign students in order to keep his job.
Conflict/obstacle: Everyone has difficulty speaking in english and brown can't understand most of them.

Act 2:

Confrontation - He slowly confronts the problem by using various methods to communicate.
Turning point - He starts teaching them simple verbs.
Conflict/Obstacles - A new student joins in and problems arise when two of the students fight for her attention.

Act 3:

Climax - The class turned rowdy and Brown leaves the class and tells the class to write an essay by referring to their textbook.

Class Exercise 1

2. Write in your blog: 
- What makes a good story? (in point form)

-characters that audience can relate to
-a good plot
-mood
-settings

3. Note the meanings/definitions of these terms on your blog:
- Screenplay - is a written work by screenwriters for a film or television program.
- Storyboard - Are graphic organizers in the form of illustrations or images displayed in sequence for the purpose of pre-visualising a motion picture, animation, motion graphic or interactive media sequence.
- Plagiarism - is copying of work from another person, and claiming it as your own.
- Pitch - is the description of a potential story that a writer sends to an editor in order to land an assignment.
- Genre - a class or category of artistic endeavour having a particular form, content,technique, or the like
- Conceptualize - to form something into a concept
- Logline - a brief summary of a television program, film , or motion picture often providing both a synopsis of the program's plot, and an emotional "hook" to stimulate interest.
- Synopsis - is a brief summary of the major points of a written work, either as prose or a table; an abridgement or condensation of a work.
- 3 Act Structure - is a model used in writing and evaluating modern storytelling which divides a screenplay into three parts called the Setup, the Confrontation and the Resolution.
- Set Up, Confrontation, Resolution - how the story starts, what conflicts takes place, how the problem is resolved?
- Treatment - A written sketch outlining the plot, characters, and action for a screenplay but not including certain elements of a finished screenplay, such as camera directions and dialogue
- Storyline - plot or subplot of a story
- Motive - the goal of the person
- Conflict - to come into a collision or disagreement

4. CASE STUDIES FOR CLASS EXERCISE:  
Do these in your blogs...

1. Write the loglines for the following movies.
2. Identify the key character & his/her/their motives.
3. Outline the 3 Act Structure in point form 
- Setup, Confrontation, Resolution, Conflict

Starship Troopers
http://youtu.be/Y07I_KER5fE

1. A young man has to fight a war against aliens to save the human mankind.

2. To fight the aliens and survive.
3. They are need to fight off the aliens.
    They were attacked by bug like aliens and many died.

Home Alone
http://youtu.be/CK2Btk6Ybm0

1. Kevin was left behind when his family forgot about him and he protects the house from bandits that wants to kidnap him.
2.  Kevin, has to hide from the bandits when he is home alone in order not to get kidnap.
3. Kevin was left behind,forgotten by his family
     Robbers went into the house after seeing that he was home alone.
     They tried various ways to get kevin but kevin manages to protect himself by using various methods.
     He successfully protects himself from the bandits till his parents comes home.

Transporter2
http://youtu.be/p7Q-WLlZl-Y

1. A man who specializes in moving goods, gets involve in a kidnap of a young child of someone powerful.
2. Frank martin has to protect the child and keep him from being kidnapped.
3. Frank is hired to keep a child safe.
    He is confronted by people who wants to kidnap the child
    He has to be alert and fight back in order to protect the child
   


Men in Black
http://youtu.be/zv35TyeRb9M

1. Two men needs to keep the aliens under wrap by fighting them and by doing so, they protect the earth.
2. Men in black, motive is to fight the aliens and protect the earth.
3. The best of the best are hired to fight the aliens that are around earth.
    They are confronted by aliens which comes in different shapes and sizes.
    The conflict they face are that they can't tell an alien from a normal human that easily
    Also, they were attacked by a huge bug-like alien
    They kill the alien and manages to save the earth from coming to any more harm.

Exercise 1

Death unknown

by

(Chia Bi Luan)

(2D)

(A detective chanced upon a case of an unknown death that occurred at the Coffee Shop and he decides to solve the case.)

EXERCISE 1 / EXERCISE 2 / FINAL ASSIGNMENT (Grade    15  % )

My Blog: (jchiabi.blogspot.com)

My Email: (biluan.chia@hotmail.com)

Deadline: 01 Feb 2013

EXECUTIVE SUMMARY:

TITLE:                                     (Death Unknown)

GENRE:                                  (mystery)

TARGET AUDIENCE:            (20-30)

THE DOMINANT CULTURAL / SOCIAL ISSUE FEATURED IN MY WORK IS:

(Citizens who was good enough to help the old man.)

LOGLINE:

(A detective chanced upon a case of an unknown death that occurred at the Coffee Shop and he decides to solve the case.)

SYNOPSIS:

(Mason Walker a detective, and his sidekick Alex Broom, had chanced upon a man who had died at the coffee shop. The cause of death was unknown and walker decided to start the investigation.

Alex was clumsy and always messes things up for Mason during their investigations. He broke a glass on the crime scene that contained the evidence that they may have need. They managed to retrieve the evidence and successfully tracked down a suspect. However, the suspect turned out to be a robber who had robbed the victim after he died.

The case remained unsolved, as they could not find any evidence of how the victim died or who could have killed him because there was no wound on him.)

CHARACTER PROFILES

CHARACTER LIST (All characters)

Key Character: Mason Walker

Supporting Character(s): Sidekick – Alex Broom

Villain (if any): Brock Willing

CHARACTER BIO OF KEY CHARACTER

Mason Walker:

A dull man who does nothing but solve cases and walks randomly around town.

Most of his cases are always solved but some are left unsolved, as he could never find the answer to them.

His sidekick creates trouble for him whenever he tries to solve a case and this makes him even duller as more troubles find their way to him.

He can't ignore his sidekick because of some personal reasons.

RESEARCH

(I found this news on a man who passed away at the Coffee Shop and it was a mystery as to how he died.

Website:

http://news.asiaone.com/News/Latest%2BNews/Singapore/Story/A1Story20120212-327423.html )

REFLECTION PAPER

(I thought of using the detective format and the genre, mystery, because I like mystery genre’s. Also, the news article stated that the man died in an unnatural way and this immediately made me think of something mysterious.

Since it was something mysterious, it led me to think of a detective. When I think of the detective, it linked me to more mysteries and troubles. Therefore, I ended up adding a twist in the plot where the suspect becomes a robber and the sidekick messes everything up. )

3 ACT STRUCTURE: (in point form below)

ACT1 SETUP	ACT2 CONFRONTATION	ACT3 RESOLUTION
Key Character(s): Mason Walker Must-have Info: Sidekick – Alex Broom	Confrontation: Walker confronts the suspect and had to chase him down as he ran away.	Climax (Grand Finale): The eyewitness was caught again, however it turned out that he robbed the victim…and he did not really witness anything… Resolution: Witness was released and charged for wasting precious time.
MOTIVE: To solve the case of the unknown death of an old man.	TURNING POINT: The evidence was still usable and walker caught the suspect.	MOTIVE RESOLVED? Motive was not resolved.
Conflict/Obstacles: Tainted evidence	Conflict/Obstacles: Alex accidentally released the suspect before they could ask what he had witnessed. Up the Stakes: There was a turn of events when the suspect became an eyewitness.	Moral of the Story if any:

TREATMENT / STORYLINE & STORYBOARD

(Mason Walker, a detective who is so dull that no one would spent time talking to him for more than a few minutes; and Alex Broom, his sidekick who messes everything up for him.

Mason had been walking around town to find more cases to solve, chanced upon a case that has never happened before. A man had been found dead at a hawker Centre and the cause of death was unknown. Mason went to the scene and saw that the man died in a weird way. The victim was sitting up and appeared to have been drinking coffee before he passed away. Witnesses said the man looked like he was sleeping as he was leaning back in the chair with his eyes shut and his body slanting slightly to one side.

It was not the first time Mason had chance upon cases, but this case was weird because the reason of death is not known. Determined to find out the cause of death, as well as the murderer, Mason and Alex began searching for evidence. Fingerprints were taken and items of the victim were sent to the lab for clues that could help solve the case. Being the klutz that he was, Alex managed to ruin the crime scene by stepping on evidence that were vital to the case and on top of that, he knocked down the cup that were suppose to contain the drink that the victim had before he died.

Mason had seen this too many times and he had given up hope that maybe someday, Alex could be a good sidekick to him. Therefore, knowing that Alex will mess up the crime scene, Mason had collected evidence as fast as he could. However, even with his speed, he did not manage to get the fingerprint from the cup before Alex broke it. Mason managed to gather the pieces of the cup. It was sent to the lab for a test for any chemicals compound that could have led to the man’s death.

They found a suspect after going through the evidence and they had tracked him down. However, the suspect ran when he saw Mason and Alex and they had to chase him down. Alex messed up again when he released the suspect by accident. Mason had to catch him again and it turned out that the suspect was a witness who had been trying to rob the body of any valuable items.

The witness was released and charged for wasting precious time, as well as, robbing the victim. The case remained unsolved, as Mason could not find any evidence that someone had drugged the victim or that someone had killed the victim. )

STORYBOARD & PRESENTATION BOARD